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The Hazards of Moviegoing
INTRODUCTION
Hook/Grabber
I am movie fanatic. May friends count on me to know movie trivia (who was the pigtailed little girl in E.T.; The Extra-Terrestrial? Drew Barrymore) and to remember every big Oscar awarded since I was in grade school (Best picture 1994? Forrest Gump).
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information/transitional sentence
My friends, though, have stopped asking me if I want to go out to the movie.
Thesis statement
While I love movies as much as ever,
the inconvenience of going out, the temptations of the theater, and the behavior of some patrons are reasons for me to wait and rent the DVD.
CONCLUSION
Summary statement
After arriving home from the movies one night, I decided that
I was no going to be moviegoer anymore.
Action/ Invitation
The next day, I arranged to have Movie on
Demand installed as part of my cable TV service, and I also got a membership at my
local video store. I may now see movies a bit later than other people,but I’ll be more
relaxed watching box office hits in the comfort of my own living room.
Restatement of thesis
I was tired of the
problems involved in getting to the theater, resisting unhealthy snacks, and dealing
with the patrons.
Body
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supporting detail
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Little kids race up and down the aisles,
usually in giggling packs.
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Teenagers try to impress their friends
by talking back to the screen, whistling, and making what they consider to be hilarious noises.
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And people of all ages create distractions.
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They crinkle candy
wrappers, stick gum on their seats, and drop popcorn tubs or cups of crushed ice and
soda on the floor.
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They also cough and burp, talk on their cell
phones, file out for repeated trips to the restrooms or concession stands, and elbow me
out of the armrest on either side of my seat.
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They comment loudly on the ages of the stars and
reveal plot twists that are supposed to be secret until the film’s end.
Topic sentence 3
Many of the other patrons are even more of a problem than
the concession stand.
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Supporting detail
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As I try to persuade myself to just have a diet
Coke, the smell of fresh popcorn dripping with butter soon overcomes me.
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Like most of us, I have to battle an expanding waistline.
Expanded detail
1
I can make do with snacks like celery and carrot sticks because there is no ice
cream in the freezer . Going to the theater, however, is like spending my evening in a Seven-Eleven that’s been equipped with a movie screen and comfortable seats.
2
Chocolate bars the size of small automobiles seem to jump into my hands. I risk putting on the pounds as I chew enormous mouthfuls of
junior Mints.
Topic sentence 2
Second, the theater offers tempting snacks that I really don’t need.
concluding sentence
By the time I leave the theater, I feel disgusted
with myself.
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Topic sentence 1
To begin with, I just don’t enjoy the general hassle of the evening.
Supporting detail
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Then it’s time to stand in an endless line, with
the constant threat that tickets for the show I want will sell out.
3
I have to shell out a ridiculous amount of money—up to $10—for a ticket.
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Since small local movie theaters are a thing of the past, I have to drive for fifteen minutes to get to the nearest multiplex. The parking lot
is shared with several restaurants and a supermarket, so it’s always jammed
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If we do get tickets,
the theater will be so crowded that I won’t be able to sit with my friends, or we’ll
have to sit in a front row gaping up at a giant screen.
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That entitles me to sit while my shoes seal themselves to a sticky floor coated with
spilled soda, bubble gum, and crushed Raisinets
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I have to drive around at a snail’s pace until I spot another driver backing out.