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ENVIRONMENTAL & CLIMATE CHANGES, MIA:, MINI TASK 3 (80-100 WORDS):…

- - - - nhà máy
    - - khí thải
    - - CO2
    - - hiệu ứng nhà kính
    - - ảnh hưởng xấu đến sức khỏe
        
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  - - - N
        
        Hạn Hán và lũ lụt
    - - N
        
        Khí thải carbon
    - - N
        
        Sự thiếu hụt lương thưc
    - - N
        
        Nơi cư trú của động vật
    - - N
        
        Chuỗi thức ăn
  - - - Tăng CO2
    - - Sự khan hiếm nước
    - - Mất đa dạng sinh học
    - - Thiên tai
- - - - Nâng cao ý thức cộng đồng
    - - Thuế thải carbon
    - - Sản xuất các chất thân thiện vói môi trường
    - - áp đặt những hình phạt nghiêm khắc
    - - Quản lí rác thải
- - - - Does not biodegrade
      - Environmental persistence
      - Densely populated regions
        
        One of the biggest problems with plastic is that it does not biodegrade. It stays in nature for hundreds of years and causes environmental persistence. In densely populated regions, a lot of plastic ends up in rivers and goes into the ocean. Marine animals often eat plastic by mistake, which can harm or kill them. Also, plastic breaks down into microplastics, which can enter the food chain. Some scientists believe these small particles pose significant risks to human health, although more research is needed.
        
        Improved Body Paragraph
        “One of the biggest problems with plastic is that it does not biodegrade. Instead, it remains in the environment for hundreds of years, leading to long-term ecological damage. In densely populated regions, large amounts of plastic are often washed into rivers and eventually flow into the ocean. Marine animals frequently mistake plastic for food, which can injure or even kill them. Furthermore, plastic gradually breaks down into microplastics, which may enter the food chain. Many scientists believe that these tiny particles pose significant risks to human health, although further research is still required.”
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        “stays in nature” → “remains in the environment” (formal).
        
        “causes environmental persistence” → “leading to long-term ecological damage” (clearer, more natural).
        
        “a lot of plastic ends up” → “large amounts of plastic are often washed into” (formal + passive).
        
        “marine animals often eat plastic by mistake” → “marine animals frequently mistake plastic for food” (natural phrasing).
        
        “some scientists believe these small particles…” → “Many scientists believe that these tiny particles…”
      - Microplastics
      - Pose significant risks
    - - Single-use plastics
      - Patterns of consumption
      - Recycling systems
      - Biodegradable alternatives
      - Renewable energy technologies
        
        There are several ways to reduce plastic pollution. First, governments can ban single-use plastics such as plastic bags, cups, and straws. Second, people need to change their patterns of consumption by using fewer plastic products and choosing eco-friendly options. Another important step is to improve recycling systems, especially in developing countries where waste is not well managed. At the same time, scientists and companies can work on creating biodegradable alternatives to replace traditional plastic. While plastic is also used in renewable energy technologies, we must find a balance between its benefits and its damage to the environment.
        
        Improved Body Paragraph (Solutions)
        “There are several effective ways to reduce plastic pollution. First, governments can introduce bans on single-use items such as plastic bags, cups, and straws. Second, individuals need to adopt more sustainable consumption habits by using fewer plastic products and choosing eco-friendly alternatives. Another important step is to strengthen recycling systems, particularly in developing countries where waste management is often inadequate. At the same time, scientists and companies should continue to develop biodegradable materials that can replace traditional plastic. Although plastic also plays a role in renewable energy technologies, society must strike a balance between its benefits and the environmental damage it causes.”
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        “ban” → “introduce bans” (formal & precise).
        
        “people need to change their patterns of consumption” → “individuals need to adopt more sustainable consumption habits” (more academic).
        
        “improve recycling systems” → “strengthen recycling systems” (stronger verb).
        
        “waste is not well managed” → “waste management is often inadequate” (formal).
        
        “we must find a balance” → “society must strike a balance” (academic phrasing).
    - - Plastic waste has become a serious environmental issue in many parts of the world. While plastic is cheap and useful, it creates many problems when it is not properly managed. This essay will discuss why plastic waste is harmful and suggest some ways to reduce it.
        
        Improved Introduction
        “Plastic waste has become a pressing environmental problem in many parts of the world. Although plastic is inexpensive and convenient, it causes serious damage when it is not disposed of properly. This essay will examine the harmful effects of plastic waste and propose several measures to address this issue.”
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        “serious environmental issue” → “pressing environmental problem”
        
        “cheap and useful” → “inexpensive and convenient”
        
        “creates many problems” → “causes serious damage”
        
        “suggest some ways to reduce it” → “propose several measures to address this issue”
    - - In conclusion, plastic waste is harmful because it lasts a long time, harms animals, and may affect human health. However, with better laws, new materials, and smarter consumer habits, we can reduce its impact and protect the environment.
        
        Improved Conclusion
        “In conclusion, plastic waste is extremely harmful because it is long-lasting, damages wildlife, and poses risks to human health. Nevertheless, through stricter regulations, the development of eco-friendly alternatives, and more responsible consumer behavior, its negative impact can be significantly reduced, thereby helping to protect the environment for future generations.”
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        “lasts a long time” → “long-lasting”
        
        “harms animals” → “damages wildlife”
        
        “may affect human health” → “poses risks to human health”
        
        Linked the solutions smoothly with “Nevertheless, through…”.
        
        Added “for future generations” to give the conclusion more weight.
- - - - Corrected Version
        “Nowadays, plastic is widely used in daily life; however, it has also become one of the biggest environmental problems. The main reason for this issue is human activities, which generate vast amounts of plastic waste. Given the severe consequences of plastic pollution, it is essential for people and governments to take urgent and effective actions to address the problem.”
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        used more commonly → widely used in daily life
        
        a biggest problem → one of the biggest problems
        
        plastic rubbish” → plastic waste/pollution
        
        Made the thesis clear and strong: urgent action is necessary.
  - - - Polluted Marine environment
      - Destroy the urban landscape
      - Affect food sounds
      - Health risk
      - Environmental degradation
      - When we are asked about plastic pollution consequences, first things that we think is it polluted marine environment. Plastic garages cause marine animals can't live and serious environmental degradation. Secondly, plastic waste affects directly food sources because of harmful chemicals which is appear in plastics. This lead to health risks such as stomach diseases and long-term illness. One of visible affects is that it destroyed urban landscapes. In big cities, plastic waste is appear on everywhere from street to build. Moreover, it affects not only landscapes but also city's tourism
        
        CORRECTED VERSION: When discussing the consequences of plastic pollution, the first issue that often comes to mind is the severe damage to marine environments. Plastic waste makes it difficult for marine animals to survive and leads to serious environmental degradation. Secondly, plastic waste directly affects food sources because harmful chemicals released from plastics can enter the food chain. This poses significant health risks, such as stomach problems and long-term illnesses. Another visible consequence is the destruction of urban landscapes. In many big cities, plastic waste can be seen everywhere, from the streets to buildings. This not only harms the appearance of the city but also negatively impacts tourism.
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        first things that we think is” → the first issue that often comes to mind
        
        Plastic garages → Plastic waste
        
        which is appear → released from plastics
        
        visible affects → visible consequence
        
        Improved flow with linking words (first issue, secondly, another visible consequence).
    - - Biodegradable material
      - Sort plastic waste
      - Recycle
      - Ban product single-use plastic
      - Impose stricter regulations
      - To reduce plastic refuse and harm of it to environment, the government should take action. One of solutions for plastic is banning product single use plastic because it is not safety for environment. Instead of producting it, they should encourage to product biodegradable and eco friendly materials. Additionally, the government need to impose stricter regulations for people who little plastic waste. On another hand, everyone should sort plastic waste and recycle things which can be reused like plastic bottles
        
        CORRECTED VERSION: To reduce plastic waste and its harmful effects on the environment, the government should take immediate action. One effective solution is to ban single-use plastic products, as they are unsafe for the environment. Instead, governments should encourage the production of biodegradable and eco-friendly materials. In addition, stricter regulations and fines should be imposed on people who litter plastic waste. On the other hand, individuals also play a crucial role. Everyone should sort their plastic waste properly and recycle items that can be reused, such as plastic bottles.
        
        MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        “plastic refuse and harm of it” → “plastic waste and its harmful effects”
        
        “banning product single use plastic” → “ban single-use plastic products”
        
        “not safety” → “unsafe”
        
        “encourage to product” → “encourage the production of”
        
        Added stronger linking phrases (One effective solution… In addition… On the other hand.)
- - - - CORRECTED VERSION:
        Plastic pollution is a serious environmental problem that requires urgent solutions. Its negative impact on the environment is considerable, particularly on marine life. Therefore, governments should take strong actions to address this issue. Without immediate intervention, the Earth’s ecosystems will continue to deteriorate under the growing burden of plastic waste
  - - - MAIN CORRECTIONS
        
        I think it very danger” → “It causes severe damage”
        
        “people should have solution” → “urgent actions should be taken by both governments and individuals”
- - - - MAIN CORRECTIONS:
        
        bar effect health → bad effect on health
        
        axemple → example
        
        reasion → reason
        
        very danger → very dangerous
        
        creative greenhouse effect → cause the greenhouse effect
        
        earth more than hot → make the Earth hotter
        
        plan many tree → plant more trees
- - - - “there are two clear cause” → “There are two major causes” (plural corrected + more formal).
      - “plastic litter is danger” → “plastic litter, which is extremely dangerous” (correct adjective use).
      - “it is non-biodegradable waste” → “As a non-biodegradable material” (more natural flow).
      - “when marine animals eat plastic. it will can die” → “when marine animals accidentally eat plastic, they may die from choking or internal damage” (clearer and grammatical).
      - “plastic not dispose properly it will produce more carbon dioxide” → “improper disposal of plastic waste, which can release harmful gases such as carbon dioxide when burned”
- - - - “so government should have more law” → “governments should introduce stricter laws”
      - “increase brain for people about waste” → “raise public awareness about the importance of waste management”
      - “government can plastic tax” → “imposing a plastic tax”
      - “If activity win” → “If these measures are implemented successfully”
      - Structured with First, Second, If… for coherence.