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Writing task 2 - Opinion essay To what extent do you agree or disagree? -…
Writing task 2 -
Opinion essay
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
ENVIRONMENT
- Some people say to
prevent illness and disease
,
government
should focus on
reducing environmental pollution
and
housing problems
. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that
governing bodies
should
give more attention
to
mitigate the problems
of
environmental pollution
and
solving housing problems
to
protect denizens
from
health issues
.
Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with this statement for the following reasons.
<> While I understand why some argue that
governmental efforts
should
primarily target
reducing environmental pollution and
addressing
housing problems,
I believe they should not be the sole focus of governmental action.
Body 1
Health complications caused by environmental issues
location: people living in
busting & industrialized metropolises
constantly exposed to fine dust & toxic fumes (from factories & transportation)
=> highly
susceptiable
to various respiratory disease
from asthma to lung cancer
Example
prove overwhelming cases increase in recent years
As a result
the number of patients would be decrease if the government took initiatives to improve the environmental conditions
TOPIC SENTENCE: To commence, environmental degradation, particularly air contamination, is the leading cause of a vast majority of health complications
Body 2
Similarly, decreased public health has been associated with housing problems
Overcrowding & inflation
people struggle to pay for dwellings
=> resort to low-income neighborhood with substandard living conditions
Include
a lack to access clean water
poor ventilation
the presence of mold
pest infestation
All of these contribute to the spread of viruses and bacteria
=> Consequently, inhabitants of such areas are likely to contract
chronic or infectious illnesses
such as
lead poisoning
diarrhea
Example
African during Ebola pandemic
in which the damage would be lower significantly if
hygiene, sanitation and clean water
had been prioritized in the first place
Conclusion
I strongly believe that a vast majority of ailments can be prevented if governments
place more importance on
dealing with environmental issues and poor housing.
VOCAB
Focus on reducing problem
Solve/address issues
Mitigate the problems
Solutions
efforts should be emphasized to address the problems
Prevent illness & disease
Public health deterioration
Health issues = health complications = ailments
Protect the citizens/detizens
The outbreak of diseases
tuberculosis, diarrhea, asthma, lung cancer..
Environmental problems
Environmental degradation
air pollution
water pollution
lead to a vast majority of
health complications
Government
implement stringent regulations
Body 1
Topic sentence - đề cập tới 2 nguyên nhân kia gây ra health issues for people if goverment won't interfere
Environmental problems
cause vấn đề gì cho người dân => Hậu quả của cái cause là gì?
Ex: Air pollution for people living in industrialized metropolises => exposed to fine dust & vehicle fumes for a long time => respiratory diseases such as lung cancer and asthma
Goverment solutions
implement stringent policies to protect the environment
=> Limit the volume of transportation means & Ensure air quality in big cities
House problems
Các vấn đề Housing mà chính phủ có thể address được bệnh truyền nhiễm: overcrowded & unsanitary => wide spread of infectious viruses or bacteria => Bệnh gì (diarrhea, Covid-19)
Đưa 1 ví dụ về nước mà giải được bệnh truyền nhiễm bằng cách giải vấn về nhà ở (new accommodations/ give funds to build new house)
Body 2
Medical facilities: vì sao nó quan trọng (bệnh gì trực tiếp bị ảnh hưởng nếu không có sự improvement của Medical facilities)
=> nếu CP đầu tư vào thì nó cải thiện được những gì về các bệnh infectious ailments
Education
awareness & knowledge => health conditions/complications
=> preventions & early interference & appropriate treatment
Topic sentence: Mặc dù 2 ý trên giúp cho public health => vẫn còn nhiều yếu tố khác contribute to people's health
EDUCATION
- It is better for the
students
to
live away from home
during their
university
studies rather than
staying with their parents
. To what extent do you agree or disagree?