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Building Blocks
Zihan Hu
BB 1
Too broad topic, focus on the details
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Harshavardhan Rathore
BB 1
The letter displays commendable clarity and a structured format. The writer effectively acknowledges positive aspects of the discussed article and offers critical insights into potential drawbacks. However, the analysis could benefit from more specificity, evidence, and exploration of alternative viewpoints. The proposal for a clear plan lacks detailed suggestions, and there's occasional repetition. Minor grammatical issues exist. Strengthening the depth of argumentation and addressing these points would elevate the overall quality of the writing. The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout, contributing to its effectiveness in conveying thoughtful feedback.
BB 3
Task 1:
Zihan's speech is well-structured, expressing gratitude for Mr. Sawatzki's influence and presenting a nuanced argument on the value of higher education. The inclusion of statistical evidence and the "signaling model" concept effectively supports the defense. The conclusion emphasizes the importance of encouraging diverse perspectives. However, the speech could benefit from addressing parental concerns more directly and anticipating counterarguments for a more comprehensive defense
Task 2:
Zihan's strategy to emphasize critical thinking and challenge an elitist view aligns with the prompt's context. The speech's potential success is acknowledged as challenging given entrenched beliefs. Zihan conducted research, citing relevant sources, and leveraged a familiar context to strengthen the argument. Notably, the use of examples contributes to clarity and persuasive impact.
Seth Wu
Too much introduction part, try to make the claim more clear and arguable
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Seth Wu
SETH WU
BB1
The argument could be strengthened by including more diverse perspectives or additional evidence to support the points made.
The letter would benefit from a more structured format, with clearer transitions between points to enhance readability and impact.
BB3
While the speech is well-structured, it could be enhanced by providing more specific examples or evidence to back up the claims about Mr. Sawatzki's teaching effectiveness.
A stronger conclusion that succinctly summarizes the key arguments and reinforces the call to action would make the speech more impactful.
Harshavardhan Rathore
BB1
The letter includes practical suggestions like lowering tuition fees and encouraging cross-disciplinary collaboration, adding depth to the argument.
A more detailed discussion on how these changes could be implemented effectively would enhance the persuasiveness of the letter.
BB3
The speech addresses the controversy surrounding Mr. Sawatzki's teaching methods in a direct and engaging manner, effectively summarizing opposing viewpoints.
he argument could be strengthened by including more varied perspectives or additional evidence to support the viewpoints expressed.
ZIHAN HU
BB1
The writing demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents a well-structured argument.
The use of personal experience and connection to Mr. Savatzki adds authenticity and relatability to the argument.
BB3
The writer effectively addresses the audience, creating a personal and engaging tone.
The argument about the importance of evaluating the purpose and value of higher education is well-articulated and relevant to the topic.
Harshavardhan Rathore
BB 3
I could use a more comprehensive analysis, exploring various aspects of the higher education debate, not solely relying on the Signalling Theory. I shoudl highlight Mr. Sawatzki's positive contributions to counterbalance the negative perception. I shouldn't have assumed the audience's familiarity with the Signalling Theory; provide brief contextual information.
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