Return to Earth’ by Edwin ‘Buzz’ Aldrin
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Short sentences
using commas for inside knowledge
Hyphens for extra information
speech to show the reader what was said
floated - like they drifted gracefully down to earth
hazy early morning- calm, peaceful and serene
a welcome change - what was it like up there was it dull to want a welcome change.
hazy early morning on earth
We floated down through a bank of clouds
hazy early morning on earth was a welcome change.
movement is an effort.
movement is an effort - engaging because unless u are ill it is not and effort to move and they weren't ill. was it gravity or an illness from space.
grunted in distress - are they hurt will they live, grunting in distress could mean they are badly injured by the wave.
All of us grunted
in distress;
The change was impressive.
Not yet.
Legs, which
are about as necessary to space travel as an appendix is to a body,stirred to activity by threatening not to function at all.
There we were, officially
taking our position in the history books of mankind,
It was July 24, 1969.
– three little balloons –
“Air Boss, Apollo 11. Everyone okay inside. Our checklist is complete. Awaiting swimmers,”
It was over. No exclamations, no slaps on the back. No handshakes.