The Motives of Our Minds- Arcs
Shelby
Virka
Shout
Reuben
Teera
Beginning- controlling, likes manipulation, likes to march to the beat of her own drum but is borderline narcissistic and is taking advantage of her brother
Beginning- thinks she is super composed and chill. Needs to learn that she, too, is flawed, and cannot 'fix' people
Add in a line about people not being able to be fixed near the end, and that she, too, needs to take her own advice, and that mere advice doesn't fix everything.
Very extroverted, but is a bit of a people-pleaser. Needs to learn to step back, evaluate what he truly wants, and become more independant
Needs to learn about the inevitability of spontaneity and loss of control. Add in a line near the end, before his accusation, that sometimes disarray is the only direction things can go, and that sometimes, when people are torn to the core, they unlock something that makes things turn out right
Semi-chill, determined, keeping her calm. Add that she has a few nervous tics that present themselves near the beginning, but only reveal that they are things Raven used to do that were brought on by her death until later.
Plot/character dynamic issues
Raven
The climax/build of suspense/speed at which their minds suddenly flip
They should hate each other more
Add a reference to who the woman at the end is, mention her as a lawyer during Teera and Reuben's POVs, as well as Shout's
Add more of his loud character in the group scenes, OR have him question why he isn't talking as much. Have more reference to his social nature in the flashbacks, ESPECIALLY in the context of him searching for validation. Make the crush thing that happens to him a step in the direction of his search not necessarily for conformity, but for social validation
Needs to move past Raven's death and stop being very defensive and untrustworthy towards people. She needs to let others in, and get to a more stable place in life. Add her getting the motivation to get to this place, for Raven, for everyone (she should let in) and not for herself. Add this near the end
Add more underlying issues
Add the first thought that it might be a joke (when Teera hasn't connected as much with Raven emotionally, using this to reveal HER character elements too), then the realisation in after the chapter of its introduction (Teera's third) that things are actually serious
More details about Raven's past relationship history and trauma, in addition to how easily affected by people she can be. Add in the fact that she is a bit of a mirror of Teera- she lets people in too easily and gets hurt from that, while Teera drifts between many people and ends up in an unstable life situation