Commissioner Hardesty Office Memo on Gun Violence in Portland
The issue of gun violence is being raised.
Start with a straightforward clue leading the audience to the topic
U.S. and Soviet Anti-Satellite Capabalities
Scowcroft raises the issue that the US hasn't done any ASAT testing for years because there wasn't any incentive to do so, but now that the Soviets have resumed testing then testing should be resumed in the US as well, providing funds to the pentagon.
do not need too many parenthetical/transition phrases
can make data synthesize to words like 'half', 'doubling', and put citation if readers can find exact numbers.
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There are some they say I say. “ some have begun calling for the reinstitution of the Gun Violence Reduction Team (GVRT). However, the data does not support that the GVRT has helped reduce shootings or that it’s defunding added to the rise in shootings in Portland.”
balance the concrete and concision
Lots of new old contract are being used.
This memo begins by explaining why he is writing and goes on to describe the current situation in ASAT testing.
Only handle outside sources using links and references, did not really mention where the source comes from in the memo.
Memo is not long and did not break into many small parts . The whole article is easy to read and it covers the whole thing in just a few paragraphs.
Definitely answers the "so what?" and "who cares"
There was some "agree/disagree" but it felt like he was responding to his own conclusions.
Informative, concise.
There is old/new method
There is summary
The document is broken down into very short paragraphs, but they all connect to one another, so it doesn't feel like the document jumps from a topic to another.
Outside sources are just summarized briefly.
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